Effective sentences

Effective sentences English 3.0 Series 2nd Meeting Compiled by Hery Yanto The WizIQ Online Class August 12, 2011Agenda ● The sentence problem ● Review: simple, complex, & compound sentence ● Writing strategy: effective sentences ● Overview: assignment due & next meetingThe sentence problem Distinguish between: WRITING with SPEAKING Review What is a sentence? What are the major elements of a sentence? What is “sentence fragment”? Can you give an example of simple sentence? Can you give an exampe of compound sentence? Can you give an example of complex sentence?Effective sentences ● Avoiding wordiness ● Varying sentence length, complexity, and word order ● Parallelism ● Choosing the right verb Avoiding wordiness ● The chairperson will give a talk to the faculties at the weekly meeting about how important it is for them to submit the lesson plan on time. – The chairperson will talk to the faculties at the weekly meeting about how important it is for them to submit the lesson plan on time. – The chairperson will talk at the faculties' weekly meeting about the importance of submitting the lesson plan on time. ● The computer store sold me a laptop that was stolen. – The computer store sold me a stolen laptop. How do you fix these sentences? ● Mrs. Ani Yudhoyono, who is Indonesian president's wife, recently yesterday was honored for her loyalty to accompany the president on leading the country. ● The English 3.0 class that was scheduled for 10.30 PM yesterday was rescheduled because Mr. The the instructor who was supposed to lead the class was leading another online class at the same time. Varying sentence complexity & length ● Ron had worked as a private detective for 25 years. He was used to investigating murder and kidnapping scenes. In the last 3 years, he had to investigate a hard case. This case was hard to solve because the murder & kidnapper was successfully moved out to another country. Ron, a private detective for 25 years, was used to investigating murder and kidnapping scenes. In the last 3 years of his career, he had to solve a hard case. This case was hard because the murder and kidnapper successfully run away to another country. How do you varying the complexity & length of these sentences? Patricia looks forward to meet her advisor, Mr. Young. Mr. Young is a famous researcher in macro economic. Other students say Mr. Young is a complicated person. He is as complicated as the field he teaches. Varying sentence complexity & length strategy ● Using coordination – and, so – either … or ... /neither … nor... – but ● Using subordination – because – after Using relative clauses – who, that – around..., into …, of …, to ...Varying word order ● Inverted order – His rickshaw was in the workshop. ● It was his rickshaw in the workshop – It is a wrong reading assigment given by the instructor. ● The instructor gave a wrong reading assignment. ● Positioning of movable modifiers – Our department will lay off some faculties because of the 75% bugdet cut. – The young man, wearing blue T-shirt and red hat, is my sister's boy friend. How do you rewrite these sentences? ● It was her jacket on the table. ● There are many people on the building veranda. ● When told that she had to have her feet amputated, the woman cried.Using parallelism ● Mr. Frisher likes to help students, counseling advisees, and mentoring new faculties. – Mr. Frisher likes helping students, counseling advisees, and mentoring new faculties. ● You can take a way the kids from their mother, but you couldn't take a way the fact that she is their mother. – You can take a way the kids from their mother, but you cann't take a way the fact that she is their mother. How to make these sentences parallel? ● The house is dark, soppy, and everything was dusty. ● Rufina's cloth was wrinkled, mismatched, and she needed to take it to laundry. ● The three hour workshop on small engine repair will cover identifying parts, analyzing situations, and to clasify problems.Choosing the right verb voice ● The importance of the telephone in daily transactions has zoomed. – The importance of the telephone in daily transaction has increased. ● Many people use answering machines to consolidate their calls. – Many people use answering machines to combine their calls.Practice using online dictionary ● http://www.macmillandictionary.com/● http://oxforddictionaries.com/Use one of these dictionaries to find the meaning of these verbs! ● Look at sample sentences the dictionary provided! complain moan deploreAssignments due for next week ● Pre-test on Quizstar/WizIQ (ungraded) ● Tweet two sentences on Twitter ● Provide feedback for peers’ sentences ● Read module 2Thank You Contact: Hery Yanto The herythe@hotmail.co.uk www.wiziq.com/uhmherythe